I have already written the Outline & Essay. I am just needing some help with the

I have already written the Outline & Essay. I am just needing some help with the

I have already written the Outline & Essay. I am just needing some help with the Corrections from the Instructor. I attached the Instructors Notes about the Outline, please help Me Correct It. I am also needing help to Rewrite the Essay to be more Correct. Thank You!!