have your essay where you use the NSLS acronym and later spell it all out (please switch so you spell it out first. You also quantify the hours of the certificate specifying 9 hours spread out over a semester, but after reading more it sounds like to be a member you complete more than 9 hours. Place the total number of hours a semester is about 145 hour plus a 9 so the total would be 154 hours. I also need the actual NSLS certificate.
You also talk about leading others, specify how you do this. Fix the spacing between paragraphs in some cases you have 4 spaces between paragraphs, remember quality is more important than quantity or making it look like more. You repeat this sentence, “The innovative format of the sessions, featuring a blend of live-streamed and pre-recorded, Speaker Broadcasts, added a dynamic layer to my learning adventure. The chance to engage with and gain insights from influential figures such as business leaders, celebrities, activists, and best-selling authors elevated the program’s impact.” It seems very odd as it is not adding any value – if you were to specify how exactly it added to your learning adventure and how and what made it impactful that would be more clear.
In this sentence, “Beyond the acquisition of leadership skills, it has facilitated a personal evolution touching upon communication, assertiveness, financial prudence, and forward-thinking” elaborate on how you have applied the communication, assertiveness and forward-thinking.
There are 3 courses on the ACE website: https://www.acenet.edu/National-Guide/Pages/Organization.aspx?oid=47834aec-d66a-ea11-a811-000d3a378f47 – from these three which did you take? 102, 202, or 302? – You see it was actually a total of 30 hours and has specific learning outcomes – these are the learning outcomes you want to talk about and how you use most of these to enhance your work or volunteer experience.